Class vitch beh ke sare hi sochan ch gwach jande koi na tu khala nehi a :he:
Bada sohna likheya vesse short da patta nehi pur : :okk:

isto vadh main hor kuch nahi keh sakda ke eh story read kardeya mere muhre v tu ohi din kharhe kar ditte jado main bussan ch yaaran naal dhakke khade c par oh din anmulle c, etho di bus te jhoota lain da v nazara nahi aunda, but ki kariye time time di gal aa, aaun wala samma kise ne nahi dekheya mitra 8->

but jo tu likhya oh tu asliyat byan kiti aa so koi shak nahi ke isda v koi mull nahi, tere jazbaat ne is "short story" andar :) ... naale ehde ch koi kami ya koi khami nahi aa saggo mainu iss galdi khushi hai ke tu koi fukarpanti nahi gholi utto tere alfaaz tere shabd bahut doonghe ne, koi sahi mayine ch punjab de school ch parya jwaak hi samjh sakda... :)
pehle do paragraphs nu read karn ton baad jad akhirle paragraphs te pahunceya te meriya akhan nam ho gyian ... kinna kuch yaad karwa ditta tu mitra  :hug: :hug: :hug: jeunda reh, rab tainu tarakiyan bakshe :D

Sat Shri Akal dosto!

main koi writer nahi... bas dil jeha bade time ton karda c k dil diyan gallan likha!
comment jrur kreo.... tareef nahi chaidi...galtiyan , kamia pesshian jrur dseo!
jiwe da v laga padh k... par j padhan lagge te sari padheo nahi te rehn deo!
dhanwaad :smile:

A Journey With Thoughts/ Sochan Di Sair
written by Kanwar Kang

Ajj main amritsar bus adde pujj gaya...haan!
pata nahi..inni purani yaad, ajj class wich bethe di kiwe taaza ho gayi...
gore kaaleyan nal ghiriya hoea mera eh shareer shayd bhajjna chahunda c...
shayad eh vi azaad hona chahunda c... samhe wich mudh k piche jana chahunda ci...class di padhai de raule.... eh pen pencilan di likhawat di awaaz te adhiaapak de bolan ton lai k mere saahan de nal andar bahar jandi hawa di goonjh jo mere poore shareer wich fail rahi c... ton door main ik aise dil nu sakoon den wale shor sharaabe wich pahunch gya.. jithon diyan hawawan bahut mithiyan c...jithe de log kal tak praaye c par hun apne jaapde c...os jagah di har ek cheez meri apni lagdi c... jis nu shuhan nu jee krda ci... jithe mere purane yaar, dil de tukkde, ghar bahar , rishtedaar, pehla pyaar rehnde ...ous duiniya di yaadan wich ena ghum ho gya ke pata hi nahi lagga class khatam ho gyi... sare vidhiaarthi apo apna smaan, kitaban, apne aap samet chuk bahar nu ja rahe c... mere class de notes de piche jo main eh kahani betha likh reha c... tan sabh ek ajeeb jihe likhayi dekh hairaan hunde te mere mukh wall dekhde... par mere sareer wich jiwe kise kisam da wawrola uchall reha c... jo shyd mere pen di nib thaani bahar nu niklana chahunda c... shyd oh v andaron hi andar ghutt reha c... fer mann wich khyal aaya jiwe asin log duniya wich ghutan mehsoos kar rhe... shyad sade jazbaat vi andron andri marr rhe... es valayit wich aa k banda machine ban janda ..kujh k na-shukre halaatan kar k paise piche daudna pai janda... os waqt bande de chaah - khushiyan marr jandiyan... jad nahaun , khaanpeen, kamkaar te saun ton elawa zindagi wich kujh nahi rehnda...fer oh bhajna chahunda hai...

ene nu adhiyaapak ne mere wall takkya te main samjh gya ...jo pichle test wichon mere aankde ghat aaye...hun ohna da bhugtaan houga! main likhna band kita te adhiyapak de table wall nu turr pea... class wich asin dowe c...
mainu anjaam pata c... baki di class de nal rallan de layi mainu oh test dobara dena paina c... te es lai ajj main school ton baad rukkeya c... tyaari mainu pata c ya fer meria kitaban nu k main pichle do haftean wich hath laa k nahi dekhiyan c...fer vi main jazbaatan te dimag wich chal rhe amritsar bus adde di tasveer nu lai k osde nal wale bench te beth gya ..adhiaapak ne mainu question paper te nal answer sheet fada ditti...kujh k swaal janu c... te kayi kade kade muh mathe lagde san... kayian nu main naam ton jaanda c te kayian nu sirf shakal ton... karde karaundean ik ik kar k main sare swaal kar ditte... swaal kardean samhe vi mere andar agge di kahani likhan de vichar ghumde rahe... main pehli war kujh likh reha c... te jo jazbaa achanchet mainu bethe bethe nu aaya ...esnu gwauna nahi chahunda ci.... main test adhiaapak nu fada k class wichon bahar niklea... unglan de pottean de wich ajeeb jihea nasha c... shyad eh v kujh kehna chahunde c....es nashe nu bnayi rakhan layi main apne bag wichon oh notes wala page kaddea... kadd k os te likhi hoyi kahani nu apne laptop de wich kaid kar lea...osnu padh dea hi main ose mahaul wich pahunch gaya jo mere dimag wich sirj reha c...

amritsar bus adda, ajj ton panj ku saal pehlan jithon main autorickshaw lai k vallah-verka (mere nanke) nu janda c... bus adda ek junction si mere layi...meri roz de safar da center point... jithe aa k main stay krda c... jiwe hun jad india nu jande waqt england stay krida... par sach ajj pata lagga mera oh 5 minute ya kayi wari te 10 sec(jad bus chheti mil jandi c) da stay bada najaredaar hunda c... hun de 8 ghantean de stay nalon...

oh shor sharaaba hun kise sufi gane nalon ghat nahi ruwaunda c... hazaaran hi yaadan juddiyan si ous bus adde nal...eh mainu ajj ehsaas hoea.... ajj tak kade supne wich v nahi aya ci... par ajj khulliyan akhan wale supne ch aa k mainu ek lekhak da roop de gya mere sohne shehar da bus adda!

oh din jad schoole jande ci...
9vi jamaat ch padh de ci...
jawaani chad rahi c...
akh ladd rahi c....
oh allarhpune diyan yaadan .c....

ohdon kise kisam da fiqar nahi si hunda....ohdon shyd oh nikkian tensiona hi bahut wadddia disdiyan c... jadon lukk lukk k nal wali jmaat wich baari de nal bethi nu dekhda c... jad ohne dekhna te mera mukh thalle ho janda... jad pata v nahi c k pehlan pyaar ki hunda... pyaar jihe paak lafaz nu nyaanpune wich kiwe roll dende c... par oh bachpana c... ohdon kach de glass tuttan te jo chidkan mildian c oh bhehdiyan lagdian c... te dilan wale dukhde lwaun nu pehal dende c.... hun tutte dilan nalon tutte kach de glass kite jyada pyaare...par hun maa chidkdi nahi...

kayi waar ikalla beth ek soch jehe merian sochan nal takkra jandi k j rabb mainu roz raat nu ik supna bachpan de dina da, de dewe..tan mainu rabb di souh kade utha nah! par rabb vi apni thaan sacha , jinha gunjalan wichon kadna chahunda...main ohna wich hi fassan nu firda! eh shareer jo ik kiraye da makaan aa... jis ch reh k asin chale jana... jinhu ik din chadna paina... jo sada hundea hoea v sada nahi... fer eh duniya , log, yaadan merian kiwe ho skdian....

veera mai yaar ehdaa baar bot kush ta nai keh sakdaa par jo b tu kihaa a darling sari cheeej da ik ik mean bandaa bro. tu mainu ajj mera b purane din cheta kraa dittaa yaaara. choootaa hunda c pindoo jalandhar padan auna lokka ne kehnaa mundaa bot vadiaa education jaiii laina par sanu pdayi naal salla koi matlab hi ni c. bas yaara nu jake mil layiaa ik vaar jafii pake sab kush cheta bhull jandaa c jeda b mind ch chalda hunda c. ajj tu sachi india de din cheta kraa ditta yaara rona jiyaa agiyaa padke veeera
fikaar naa kar apaa keda ithe pakkka rehnaa jaddo ji kitaa apna sohna desh apaa ud chalanaa veera fikar na kariaa kar
waheguru naal a apne sariyaa de. jo shad gai dil cho kad gayi praa kar ohnu apni life nu enjoy karbro

nice sharing........... bahut wadiya feelings share kitiyaan ne .. :won:
waise mainu laga short story heading hai ta 9 - 10 lines di hou wad wad but  :superhappy:
but jad dil di gal ya experiance share karan lagiye ta pata nahi chalda short to kad long ban janda , dil karda likhi jaaiye................... but fer read karan waliya bare wi sochna painda hai, ki ina wada read kaun karu .... : :

u knw jasi rehnde aa jithe wadde hunde aa jithe palde aa oh mahool sadde li khas ho janda jadd asi os mohool cho kisse nawe mahool jande aa ta life da best time sannu bhaut yaad aunnda like os time life without tenstion cu di  na koi fiker na fakka hun jadd sir te paindi aa ta oh cheeza jo life de sweet moments hunde aa yadan ban ke reh jande aa jadd mind ch aunnde aa dil nu skoon dinde aa  mainu b ajj uk de kai moments yaad aa gaye jo main school time ja bachpan ch apne dada ji nal sapnd kitte c like main or mere grandphs night nu ik park ch jande c ohthe ik indian buddi bebe aunndi c main dada  ji nu kahndi hundi c appa daddi bna laini lot of things  kai war  oh life da time yada ban ke reh janda respect u kk tusi ik culture cho dosre ch aa ke b apne pyurane dila nu gloden time nu sambhaal ke rakhiya :hug: :hug:  nhn ta lok nawe ranga ch  rang ke purane bhull jandi gud thing aa u  ne apni os time nu ajj b apni life ch atza rakhiya  :okk:

u knw jasi rehnde aa jithe wadde hunde aa jithe palde aa oh mahool sadde li khas ho janda jadd asi os mohool cho kisse nawe mahool jande aa ta life da best time sannu bhaut yaad aunnda like os time life without tenstion cu di  na koi fiker na fakka hun jadd sir te paindi aa ta oh cheeza jo life de sweet moments hunde aa yadan ban ke reh jande aa jadd mind ch aunnde aa dil nu skoon dinde aa  mainu b ajj uk de kai moments yaad aa gaye jo main school time ja bachpan ch apne dada ji nal sapnd kitte c like main or mere grandphs night nu ik park ch jande c ohthe ik indian buddi bebe aunndi c main dada  ji nu kahndi hundi c appa daddi bna laini lot of things  kai war  oh life da time yada ban ke reh janda respect u kk tusi ik culture cho dosre ch aa ke b apne pyurane dila nu gloden time nu sambhaal ke rakhiya :hug: :hug:  nhn ta lok nawe ranga ch  rang ke purane bhull jandi gud thing aa u  ne apni os time nu ajj b apni life ch atza rakhiya  :okk:

thankyou ji ....
and yeah tusi sahi kihea yaadan nahi bhull diyan! :smile:

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je ina wadiya likhde ho ta tusi pawe 10 pages da likho ........
m sure sare bahut pyaar te khushi naal read karan ge......
m also love to read - stories, articles, shaayri........and general knowledge things...

:smile:
bahut time pichon likhi kal eh story... sabh ton pehli war 7th grade wich likhi c ..ohdon main harry potter movie badi dekhda hunda c :he: ohdi sari summary ik poori book wich likhi c.... approx. 90 pages honge... meri book poore school ch mashoor hundi c..kade kise teacher ne padhan layi lai laini kade kise student ne... fer gwaach gayi :sad:
os din ton baad kade kujh likhea nahi... fer kal ekdum ohi lor jehi chadd gayi... child level ton maturity ch aa gya ...
hun jrur liheya karnia... par PJ te sarian nahi paunga... 10 wichon 1 jrur post krunga :smile: thanks again :smile:

balle kanwara att karra ti... swad he ah gea.... meriya v bachpan.diya yaada tazza kra tiya tu..... :okk:

aur jo last ch lyn likhi tu ... main kya dhaan dhaan karra ti :hug:

:hug:  thankyou veer ji :happy:

very nyc kang..

thankyou ji :hehe: